tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8184562969471581744.post6925805517864272441..comments2024-03-04T02:09:30.979-06:00Comments on One Man's Pony Ramblings: First Sentences In (Fan)Fiction the 7thUnknownnoreply@blogger.comBlogger12125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8184562969471581744.post-78482574077152694222015-09-21T23:49:52.621-05:002015-09-21T23:49:52.621-05:00Monster in the Twilight: On the downside... "...Monster in the Twilight: On the downside... "the nervous tension that ate at her soul" sounds really hokey, and feels overwrought and almost silly without context. I'll go 2 stars for this, since it's triggered a warning bell or two in my head.<br /><br /><br />Since the entire fic *is* over the top, from Twilight nearly destroying Canterlot at her elementary school exam, to Queen Chrysalis being blown up with applied science (and a few thousand tons of nitrocellulose, but mostly the nitrocellulose), that is a perfectly accurate first impression. Thanks!Georg Felishttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03550333227450728733noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8184562969471581744.post-71961050684388271832015-09-19T20:55:25.005-05:002015-09-19T20:55:25.005-05:00Mortality Report: "Still 2 stars, as it's...Mortality Report: "Still 2 stars, as it's hardly a bad first sentence; it's just unmemorable and general."<br /><br />It's a fair cop.Bad Horsehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10735227563256689679noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8184562969471581744.post-57380482339886547462015-09-15T15:58:30.937-05:002015-09-15T15:58:30.937-05:00Eh, put a sock in it.
Moderately-escapable forcec...Eh, put a sock in it.<br /><br />Moderately-escapable forcecage.Unremarkable Ponyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12490181982921850794noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8184562969471581744.post-78108460254725777502015-09-15T13:48:45.185-05:002015-09-15T13:48:45.185-05:00I kind of have to disagree with the econimics port...I kind of have to disagree with the econimics portion of what you just said. Rarity herself said, "I will use Ponyville as home base, and send the designs up here." In other words, she makes the dresses and comes up wiht the designs while Sassy makes it in Canterlot. Sassy isn't evil, just over enthuastic, so she is using that. Sassy can perform her own TLC on each work and help out the customers in her own way. Basically, Sassy will handle the work and manufactoring from the creator while the creator does what she does best.Khttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17763120362607389821noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8184562969471581744.post-14004180200581055892015-09-15T06:13:08.995-05:002015-09-15T06:13:08.995-05:00As a paladin of the Sapphire Guard, I cannot let t...As a paladin of the Sapphire Guard, I cannot let this lame attempt at roleplaying stand lest it defile the world further with its wickedness. <br /><br />SMMMIIITTTTEEEE EVIL!!!!<br /><br />****Goes off to pray to the Twelve Gods****Bugs the Curmhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12995195569022345933noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8184562969471581744.post-20135349384795647842015-09-14T15:36:43.481-05:002015-09-14T15:36:43.481-05:00Thog not think trees strange. Trees fall down whe...Thog not think trees strange. Trees fall down when Thog hits with axe, just like talky-man!Chrishttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11581572699330155065noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8184562969471581744.post-52730217394390445042015-09-14T11:02:56.793-05:002015-09-14T11:02:56.793-05:00I'd say it retrospectively casts Fire Gazer as...I'd say it retrospectively casts Fire Gazer as the Jack London of our timeHolly Oatshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01703437987958922954noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8184562969471581744.post-23667025524733677532015-09-14T07:59:29.948-05:002015-09-14T07:59:29.948-05:00So we should start complaining about "pacing ...So we should start complaining about "pacing report" openings now too, huh?<br /><br /><i>The weird fixation on AJ's sweatiness through the opening scene feels almost fetishistic, which casts that first sentence in an unfortunate light in retrospect.</i><br /><br />See, I would call this a "hilarious light" in retrospect. :VPresent Perfecthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16195959811544391904noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8184562969471581744.post-15581607522760018282015-09-14T07:02:55.797-05:002015-09-14T07:02:55.797-05:00"Trees are strange things."
Aye. Ye dun..."Trees are strange things."<br /><br />Aye. Ye dunnae know when they're just gonnae attack!InquisitorMhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10209346997929773686noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8184562969471581744.post-53323677712089917832015-09-14T04:48:30.523-05:002015-09-14T04:48:30.523-05:00I'm envious of Celestia. No one writes stories...I'm envious of Celestia. No one writes stories about <i>my</i> anxiety-driven obsessive pacing, and I do it every day!SVnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8184562969471581744.post-52280528334198070362015-09-14T02:25:59.499-05:002015-09-14T02:25:59.499-05:00Wednesday will explain everything.Wednesday will explain everything.InquisitorMhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10209346997929773686noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8184562969471581744.post-31635813905187918872015-09-14T01:13:22.033-05:002015-09-14T01:13:22.033-05:00You're going to start including first sentence...You're going to start including first sentences in future reviews, aren't you? If so, I approve of this changeHolly Oatshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01703437987958922954noreply@blogger.com