tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8184562969471581744.post5630169741696407436..comments2024-03-04T02:09:30.979-06:00Comments on One Man's Pony Ramblings: 6-Star Reviews Part 114: Postal Blues and Grey FeathersUnknownnoreply@blogger.comBlogger12125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8184562969471581744.post-35643855585812536952012-11-13T18:20:43.123-06:002012-11-13T18:20:43.123-06:00This comment has been removed by the author.DPV111https://www.blogger.com/profile/01437920503784386649noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8184562969471581744.post-85878300394900179392012-11-13T13:07:59.255-06:002012-11-13T13:07:59.255-06:00I know my writing in Transcendence sucked huge mon...I know my writing in Transcendence sucked huge monkey butt (and RR doesn't fair too much better), but I have learned much through my time writing and have been rewriting the whole thing from the ground up. It needs it.<br /><br />@Sessalisk<br />Prose is fixed from chapter 12 on, and as mentioned above, will be for the rest soon, too.<br /><br />I'm curious to see how hard Chris bombs my story. It'll be fun.Corejohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18156281457261254678noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8184562969471581744.post-47045241186498579122012-11-07T23:59:56.161-06:002012-11-07T23:59:56.161-06:00I am unable to launch a convincing counter-argumen...I am unable to launch a convincing counter-argument. Therefore, I am forced to concede defeat.<br /><br />...Well played.Mystichttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03814377439751758620noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8184562969471581744.post-58537945453265727342012-11-07T22:08:00.078-06:002012-11-07T22:08:00.078-06:00Because lysergic acid diethyalamide is way better....Because lysergic acid diethyalamide is way better. Duh!Sessaliskhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16825618257183827711noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8184562969471581744.post-26269475803360870612012-11-07T21:31:03.634-06:002012-11-07T21:31:03.634-06:00Why all the hate for lactic acid, man? D:Why all the hate for lactic acid, man? D:Mystichttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03814377439751758620noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8184562969471581744.post-10781346598915711082012-11-07T18:26:29.045-06:002012-11-07T18:26:29.045-06:00Actually, looking at the chapter in question, it&#...Actually, looking at <a href="http://www.fimfiction.net/story/8354/4/Transcendence/Chapter-4" rel="nofollow">the chapter in question</a>, it's been edited since then.Sessaliskhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16825618257183827711noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8184562969471581744.post-49177439541022159152012-11-07T18:15:26.889-06:002012-11-07T18:15:26.889-06:00It's on hiatus, so if there's a big payoff...It's on hiatus, so if there's a big payoff I don't think it would be there yet. And to my knowledge, the prose is pretty consistent, although I only made it up to chapter 7 or so.<br /><br />"The wind swept through Scootaloo’s mane as she flew just above the treetops, tailing her prey with an insatiable zeal. Her muscles ached with fatigue and the <b>growing buildup of lactic acid as her metabolism switched to anaerobic respiration.</b>"<br /><br /><i>That</i> happens some time in a later chapter. I am not kidding.Sessaliskhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16825618257183827711noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8184562969471581744.post-43795355459084050022012-11-07T10:10:05.684-06:002012-11-07T10:10:05.684-06:00Should I try reading Transcendence? I remember att...Should I try reading Transcendence? I remember attempting some months ago and not being able to go through the first chapter. Is there some kind of big pay off at the end, or at least the writing gets a little less flowery?Sogenoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8184562969471581744.post-26551558797501491002012-11-07T09:22:34.399-06:002012-11-07T09:22:34.399-06:00Sorry. I kept reading and then I exploded.Sorry. I kept reading and then I exploded.Sessaliskhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16825618257183827711noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8184562969471581744.post-16516989714628227282012-11-07T09:21:46.845-06:002012-11-07T09:21:46.845-06:00"'‘A form ne-neer? Nerr?’'
'I t..."'‘A form ne-neer? Nerr?’'<br /><br />'I think you mean ‘ne’er,’' Twilight happily supplied. 'It’s a Shakesponian contraction used to remove excess syllables and keep a poem’s meter in check, though this one seems to be in free verse.'"<br /><br />... Why am I raging so hard right now? Is it because the definition of "ne'er" is correct, yet Twilight does not seem to realise that <i>rhyming couplets are not free verse</i>? Sessaliskhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16825618257183827711noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8184562969471581744.post-40692652174086317352012-11-07T09:09:37.026-06:002012-11-07T09:09:37.026-06:00Huh. I've never read that one, but I recognize...Huh. I've never read that one, but I recognized the author as that guy who wrote that story about Scootaloo — the one with prose more florid than almost anything I've seen outside of a parody. (Sorry, <a href="http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7720938/1/Idolatry" rel="nofollow">Cerulean Pen</a> takes the cake there.)<br /><br />So, I just checked it out myself, just to see what the big fuss about it was. And... well...<br /><br />:|<br /><br />I know I'm pretty bad at figuring out rhythm and meter myself, but, eh. I'll just shut up and wait till Friday.Sessaliskhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16825618257183827711noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8184562969471581744.post-40480632142027750802012-11-07T05:24:39.091-06:002012-11-07T05:24:39.091-06:00GRAHHH NOT READING RAINBOWGRAHHH NOT READING RAINBOWPresent Perfecthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16195959811544391904noreply@blogger.com