tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8184562969471581744.post1500124928823062813..comments2024-03-04T02:09:30.979-06:00Comments on One Man's Pony Ramblings: First Sentences in (Fan)Fiction the 4thUnknownnoreply@blogger.comBlogger10125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8184562969471581744.post-41003216945425325282015-04-28T22:12:16.376-05:002015-04-28T22:12:16.376-05:00The first sentence got a whole star more than The ...The first sentence got a whole star more than The Elements of Harmony and the Savior of Worlds itself. I am not sure how to feel about it, but verging on something bad.RK_Striker_JK_5https://www.blogger.com/profile/00634122147565078882noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8184562969471581744.post-24862829863586395352015-03-19T09:21:29.675-05:002015-03-19T09:21:29.675-05:00Oh, right. Totally forgot about thatOh, right. Totally forgot about thatHolly Oatshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01703437987958922954noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8184562969471581744.post-8405458133552410362015-03-19T06:54:52.545-05:002015-03-19T06:54:52.545-05:00The star next to the title is the star rating of t...The star next to the title is the star rating of the fic.<br />The rating in the text is the rating of the first line alone.InquisitorMhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10209346997929773686noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8184562969471581744.post-7551485769115961362015-03-19T00:59:41.379-05:002015-03-19T00:59:41.379-05:00The Elements of Harmony and the Savior of Worlds, ...<i>The Elements of Harmony and the Savior of Worlds</i>, 1 star<br />"On balance, I'll go two stars."<br /><br /><i>Believing Stories</i>, 2 stars<br />"I'm breaking out the five stars for this one."<br /><br /><i>One in a Million</i>, 2 stars<br />"... this is a one-star for me."Holly Oatshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01703437987958922954noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8184562969471581744.post-88107029135696684282015-03-18T18:30:15.468-05:002015-03-18T18:30:15.468-05:00Oh you punster. I may have just woken someone up w...Oh you punster. I may have just woken someone up with my chortling.InquisitorMhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10209346997929773686noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8184562969471581744.post-25472447319074213732015-03-18T18:23:43.053-05:002015-03-18T18:23:43.053-05:00@ Oats: I just double-checked, but everything look...@ Oats: I just double-checked, but everything looked right. Which ratings did I mess up?<br /><br />Some sort of "how I'd write it" would be interesting, though as M hints, I'm not sure I'm up for the time commitment--or that I'm all that good with first sentences, myself.<br /><br />@ Pasco: Flattery will get you nowhere. <br /><br />In unrelated news, keep your eyes peeled for Pascoite's upcoming five-star masterpiece, <i>A Reviewer Runs Through It</i>!<br /><br />@M: If he makes it work in context, he'll have darn well earned it.Chrishttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11581572699330155065noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8184562969471581744.post-27894619793069450392015-03-18T07:44:12.561-05:002015-03-18T07:44:12.561-05:00Make that work in context, Pascoite, and I will ph...Make that work in context, Pascoite, and I will physically mail you a gold star.InquisitorMhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10209346997929773686noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8184562969471581744.post-15289320757196383902015-03-18T07:43:03.036-05:002015-03-18T07:43:03.036-05:00Geez, did you want to make Chris do some actual wo...Geez, did you want to make Chris do some actual <i>work</i> or something?<br /><br />But yeah, it's be interesting, especially since I'm at odds with his take on what a first sentence should be.InquisitorMhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10209346997929773686noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8184562969471581744.post-4491827782202889142015-03-18T07:35:49.100-05:002015-03-18T07:35:49.100-05:00"Upon opening the story, Chris was immediatel..."Upon opening the story, Chris was immediately enthralled."<br /><br />I'll have to try that one some time.Pascoitehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05861834765162800926noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8184562969471581744.post-57846192798511355592015-03-18T01:06:19.829-05:002015-03-18T01:06:19.829-05:00Might wanna fix the star ratings for three of thos...Might wanna fix the star ratings for three of those<br /><br />Know what'd make this series even better? Fixing up the sentences. I know that, were I an author, I'd love to see an example of how I could've done betterHolly Oatshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01703437987958922954noreply@blogger.com